Excellent work Bethan, very well done! And you should be thanking Helena too - great performance. If you meet the age requirements, enter it independently for the 2010 film fest. There's one notable flaw: the later voiceover really dips in volume. If you can sort that out when we get back I'll accept an updated version with that specific change You've got some real issues around representation to explore here. I wonder if it might be an idea to contact some youth charities and see if they'd be interested in using this? Remind me when we're back to see if th school might be interested in using with lower school.
just re-viewing: music cuts very abruptly at 1:08/9, should fade down or end or a lingering note. some interference (scratches) in outro music too. helena picking up paper rather breaks verisimilitude all points for your evaluation
Excellent work Bethan, very well done! And you should be thanking Helena too - great performance. If you meet the age requirements, enter it independently for the 2010 film fest.
ReplyDeleteThere's one notable flaw: the later voiceover really dips in volume. If you can sort that out when we get back I'll accept an updated version with that specific change
You've got some real issues around representation to explore here. I wonder if it might be an idea to contact some youth charities and see if they'd be interested in using this? Remind me when we're back to see if th school might be interested in using with lower school.
just re-viewing: music cuts very abruptly at 1:08/9, should fade down or end or a lingering note. some interference (scratches) in outro music too.
ReplyDeletehelena picking up paper rather breaks verisimilitude
all points for your evaluation